decrease of X%

[Kacy.H]

Hello, everybody
I don't know where I should insert data when using "decrease of"

The increase in the three categories mentioned above could also be reflected in the sharp decrease in the population who could only speak their mother tongue, of a half to only 10% in 2010.

Or

The increase in the three categories mentioned above could also be reflected in the sharp decrease of a half to only 10% in 2010 in the population who could only speak their mother tongue

Thank you so much for all the help I have received in this amazing web!

 

[Franco-filly]

Do you mean it was "half" the population, i.e. 50%, and went down to 10%?
It so I suggest, " ...in the sharp decrease, from down 50% to 10%, of those who.."

 

[Fern_]

To me it seems like too much information to squash into the noun clause. I'd add it as a relative clause.
...in the sharp decrease in the population who could only speak their mother tongue, which decreased from 20% to 10% in 2010.

 

[Kacy.H]

Do you mean it was "half" the population, i.e. 50%, and went down to 10%?
It so I suggest, " ...in the sharp decrease, from down 50% to 10%, of those who.."

No, it decreased from 20% to 10%, so it decreased by a half. That's what I want to say.
Thanks

 

[Kacy.H]

To me it seems like too much information to squash into the noun clause. I'd add it as a relative clause.
...in the sharp decrease in the population who could only speak their mother tongue, which decreased from 20% to 10% in 2010.

do I have to write "decrease" again.
What's about :
....in the sharp decrease in the population who could only speak their mother tongue from 20% in 2000 to 10% in 2010.

I was trying to use "a half" instead of "20%", because it will help me get a higher score.

Thanks

 

[Franco-filly]

Perhaps you can use a sentence something like "[Correspondingly] the percentage of those who could only speak their mother tongue was halved - from 20% in 2000 to 10%- between 2010.

 

[Kacy.H]

Perhaps you can use a sentence something like "[Correspondingly] the percentage of those who could only speak their mother tongue was halved - from 20% in 2000 to 10%- between 2010.

Thanks, this is very genius. This makes my sentence so much shorter.

Do you mean it was "half" the population, i.e. 50%, and went down to 10%?
It so I suggest, " ...in the sharp decrease, from down 50% to 10%, of those who.."

about this one, do I have to use "from...to..."? Is "of...to..." unclear?
....in the sharp decrease, of a half to 10%, in those who...

Thank you so much

 

[Franco-filly]

If you are comparing two percentages you use "from... to..." e.g. "a sharp decrease, (down) from 50% to 10%. [not "from down" as I typed in post #2]; from 17% to 3%, etc...."

I'm finding it hard to use "a half" when the sentence contains percentages, as I tend to think one means "half a percent"

 

[Kacy.H]

If you are comparing two percentages you use "from... to..." e.g. "a sharp decrease, (down) from 50% to 10%. [not "from down" as I typed in post #2]; from 17% to 3%, etc...."

I'm finding it hard to use "a half" when the sentence contains percentages, as I tend to think one means "half a percent"

So, the problem is not "decrease of..to.." and "decrease from...to...". The problem is I need to keep the form of the data uniform, right?

So, I can both write:
There was a significant growth, of 18,000 to 92,000, in the population who toured the museum after it was renovated.

and

There was a significant growth, from 74,000 to 92,000, in the population who toured the museum during the year before and after it was renovated.

Thanks a lot

 

[Franco-filly]

So, I can both write:
There was a significant growth, of 18,000 to 92,000, in the population who toured the museum after it was renovated.
and
There was a significant growth, from 74,000 to 92,000, in the population who toured the museum during the year before and after it was renovated