01
Jun
09

citric affair

Thank you all for your comments to the earlier post. For the next exercise, Pat passed around an orange and asked us to feel it, smell it, observe the inside of the peel and finally each of us got a piece to eat.  The exercise was to describe an orange using our 5 senses – touch, sight, sound, taste, smell. so here goes my version…

When I saw the orange, its lime green colour with a hint of yellow and orange captivated me. A small round object with thick dimpled skin…coarse at some places, smooth at others, the texture of the orange felt like a stress buster in my hands. No sooner did I bring it near my nose than it unleashed a dominant citric fragrance that set my taste buds salivating. The rind was fresh and juicy, a very good clue as to how the fruit would be. As I popped a piece of orange in my mouth, its tangy flavour burst open within leading to a sweet sour taste. I could distinctly hear my molars grinding the fruit to a pulp while my tongue mingled with the juice. Finally the fibrous pulp slid down my throat leaving a lingering citrus after taste.

Thus ended my brief affair with an orange.


6 Responses to “citric affair”


  1. Achyut's avatar 1 Achyut
    June 1, 2009 at 4:40 am

    You’re quite good at this. Look forward to reading some of you short stories.

    • aanch's avatar 2 aanch
      June 2, 2009 at 3:11 pm

      hey achyut…thanks for the feedback…the other 2 bums will not do anything…thank god for people like you…hahahha

      • Ashish Deodhar's avatar 3 Ashish Deodhar
        June 5, 2009 at 2:34 pm

        Sorry Aanchal but that somehow sounded kinda erotic to me 🙂 Or is it just my perverted mind!!

      • aanch's avatar 4 aanch
        June 6, 2009 at 4:28 am

        hehehe…AD you need to get over the dry spell and fast…anyway I think that’s the beauty of unrestrained writing. It evokes different emotions in different people. So the writer can connect on that many more different levels with the reader.

  2. patricia's avatar 5 patricia
    September 21, 2009 at 12:33 pm

    Liked the ending ‘brief affair with the orange.’ Now start an affair with some more ‘fruits.’


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